The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.

The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.
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The bar graph shows the information about the number of people who made questions collected from the tourist information office in a particular urban based in person, letter/ email and telephone from January to June in the year of 2011.
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. with the exception of letter/email, There are great improvements in the other two methods after April massively. Regarding the individual, it started with the least chosen method in April which was 410
times
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,
Although
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, it sharply increased every month, at the
last
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, it reached 1900
times
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in June and was the most popular amongst these sections.
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, letters/emails had the opposite effect on the individual. It almost remained the same from January to March just under 800 to 700
times
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. And dramatically lost points to 400 and settled in June. Looking at the telephone,
while
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it fluctuated at the very beginning of the year, it managed to expand
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large amount of numbers from 1000 to 1600
times
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respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words times with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Questionnaire
  • Tourist Information Office
  • Individual submission
  • Letter/email communication
  • Telephone survey
  • Fluctuation
  • Stable trend
  • Gradual increase
  • Varied patterns
  • Surpassed
  • Significant rise
  • Seasonal peak
  • Tourist behavior
  • Information campaign
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