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Only government action can solve housing shortages in big cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #action #shortages #cities
It is sometimes believed that
housing
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 shortage is only solved by the
government
.
This
 essay strongly agrees with
this
 suggestion for several reasons. The first argument given to support my idea is
that
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 legal power of the
government
.
This
 arises from the fact that the
government
 plays an important role in order to ensure
a
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 life of their people. Mainly because there are various
situation
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 which can not be solved by citizens, and
also
 rules are just given by the
government
 to organise a country.
For instance
, the
government
 can introduce high taxes
of
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 owning properties, so that houses are left for people who have low income. Another point behind my belief is
rules
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 and policies of the
government
. There are
efficent
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efficient
 policies introduced by the
government
 to assist residents who have housing problems.
For example
, introducing
an
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economy
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 rules or policies in companies to make sure that people can have adequate income to cover their life.
As a result
, the issue of
less
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 houses will become better. In conclusion, I totally agree that
actions
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 of the
government
 can solve
housing
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 shortage issue given the aforementioned arguments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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