The two pie charts show the sources of income of ANZ theatres and heritage trust, à government funded organisations, in the year 1980 and 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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various ways revenue is

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generated

by ANZ theatres. From an

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overall perspective

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the contribution of income from

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individuals

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saw an upward trend ,

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all other remaining sources

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revealed

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a downward trend in given trend. Its clearly evident that Industrial and

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both years. In 1980 stood

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36 % before peak position in

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second most revenue generators for over 20 years ,

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revenue fell from 24 % to 20%. In 2000 Income by tickets accounted reported

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of income generated in 1980 (21 % in 1980). Monet generated from shops comprised a

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of 18% in 1880,before

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falling to 11% in 2000

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The two pie charts show the sources of income of ANZ theatres and heritage trust, à government funded organisations, in the year 1980 and 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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