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The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or collage lecturer.

The graphs show figures relating to hours worked and stress levels amongst professionals in eight groups. Describe the information shown to a university or collage lecturer.
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The given graphs illustrate the average number of
hours
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 worked per
week
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 and the stress level among workers. There are eight professions: writers, doctors, chefs, lecturers, movie makers, IT people, and entrepreneurs.
Overall
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, doctors, film producers, and businessmen experience the highest time worked.
However
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, writers, cookers, teachers, lawyers, and programmers show less than them. People who suffer from anxiety are lecturers and movie makers.
Nonetheless
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, programmers experience less overthinking.
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 with, employers are determined by their work
hours
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 in term 70
hours
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 per
week
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. The first is above 35
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 per
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, and the other is under 35. Doctors, lawyers, cinema producers, and entrepreneurs are in the first category.
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, the professional who spends the highest time on work is businessmen. They spend more than 35
hours
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 per
week
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. Meanwhile, writers, chefs, teachers, and programmers are under 35
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, and the lowest proportion is teachers.
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, 25% population of lectures show the highest stress related to illness, followed by movie producers at 18%.
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, IT people show less anxiety at 15%, experiencing the lowest pressure.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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