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The maps below shows the village of stokeford in 1930 and in 2010

The maps below shows the village of stokeford in 1930 and in 2010
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The two maps illustrate how the
village
 of
Stokeford
 had developed from 1930 to 2010.
Overall
, there have been several significant changes in terms of demolitions, constructions and modernizations in
Stokeford
village
.One of the considerable changes in
Stokeford
village
 was the demolition. In 1930, there were two farmlands which were located to the
south-west
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 and
north-east
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northeast
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 side,
however
, these farmlands were knocked down to construct houses for residents in 2010. Another striking change that occurred in
this
village
 was new additions.By 2010, new shops had been opened on the north side of the path that crossed the map.As mentioned above, some buildings were replaced by other buildings on
this
 map.
For
instance
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 In 2010, the park, located in the southeast of the
village
 of
Stokeford
, was replaced by a house in 2010.During the given period, some parts of the
village
 of
Stokeford
 did not change.
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