The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrate the percentage of
citizen
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
which
born in Correct pronoun usage
apply
Australia
and outside Australia
who live in urban, and
rural and city in 1995 and 2010. Correct word choice
apply
Overall
,city
is the most popular place to live for both Australians and non-Australians in those years ,Add an article
the city
however
more Add a comma
,however
people
moved to town compared to 1995.
As described in the given charts, around half of the total people
who were born in Australia
in 1995 lived in urban areas
and those numbers increased to more than 60 percent
in 2010. Change the spelling
per cent
However
, the number of citizens who
in town and rural Correct pronoun usage
apply
areas
decreased in 2010 compared to 1995. In 2010, there was
around 15 per cent households in both towns and rural Change the verb form
were
areas
.
People
who born
outside Add a missing verb
were born
Australia
chose cities as their place to live with approximately 60 percent
in 1995 and significantly rose in 2010 which Change the spelling
per cent
80
Add a missing verb
was 80
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
In contrast
, there were 40 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
people
who lived in rural areas
moved to other areas
and 15 years later, less than 10 percent
Change the spelling
per cent
who
lived Correct pronoun usage
apply
in
here.Change preposition
apply
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, people, areas, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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