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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second charts shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second charts shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when relevant.
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The
first
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 pie chart illustrates the amount of
energy
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 used in an average Australian
household
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while
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 the second one demonstrates the percentage of
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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.
First
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 of all, heating
energy
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 is significantly used in Australian households
whereas
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gas
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 emission for water heating is the greatest percentage of Australian
household
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greenhouse
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. On the opposite, cooling is the least amount of using
energy
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 in the
household
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.
In addition
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, the mass of
energy
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 apply for cooling and the amount of
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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 which result from
this
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energy
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 use is almost the same. In the
first
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 chart, the total
energy
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 needed for refrigeration is 7 % which is twice in
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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. At the same time,
energy
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 consumption for lighting is two-time the rise in
gas
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emissions
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.
According to
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 the
first
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 picture,
energy
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 for heating makes up half of
household
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energy
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 use.
Energy
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 for other appliances considerably increased and it stands as an upward trend.
On the contrary
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, the
Energy
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 used for heating is substantially by 27 % decreased . All in all,
energy
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 using
household
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 affects
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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 .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words first, energy, household, greenhouse, gas, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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