Many people prefer to watch foreign films than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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people
like to see foreign
movies
rather than
films
produced regionally. It will be discussed in
this
essay why is
that
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and if it is a good idea for governments to support producing local
film
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films
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financially. The most important reason to prefer exotic
films
could be
the
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quality
of them. If you are living in a country with a backward film industry and many limitations and censorship, ultimate productions won't make you consent in comparison with
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movies
. Except for the
quality
of the
films
, it could have other reasons,
for
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there is more variety in other
countries
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countries'
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movies
, because of different cultures, so it would be more exciting to watch them generally. Governments have
this
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possibility to invest in their film industry, and by supporting them make
improvement
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in final productions.
Therefore
that's a practical idea for raising the
quality
of local
films
.
by
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doing
this
more
people
show interest in native
movies
, and
at
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the
end
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it leads to an advanced motion picture industry, which is necessary in a world
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people
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entertainment
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, there are reasons like more
quality
and variety in foreign
movies
which make them more appealing to
people
to watch.
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governments should support inside production financially to make them develop in the long term.
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  • Cultural exchange
  • Cinematic expertise
  • Diverse narratives
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  • Linguistic proficiency
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