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Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#companies #salaries #ceos #executives #workers
I strongly agree that big
company
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companies
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 should give
CEOs
 and
executives
 more wages than other workers.
This
 is because
CEOs
 and
executives
 have more challenges
on
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 their jobs and their decisions can affect the
company
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company's
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 direction.
CEOs
 and
executives
 will
facing
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face
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 with loads of
work
, they
also
 need to plan and manage
on
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what will other workers be working on.
This
 may lead to more stress
while
 they are working. In return,
company
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the company
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 should give them more
incomes
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income
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 for what they do for the
company
.
While
 most of the
company
decision
 is upon
CEOs
 and
executives
, if the
company
 give them higher salaries, they will do their best on their
decision
 because if they make a wrong
decision
, it may
effect
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 the
company
 funds. Which may
effect
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affect
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 their salaries and can lead to lower salaries for themselves.
As a result
, they will do their best to lead the
company
to
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 the right direction. Another reason is that if
company
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 give them
a high wages
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high wages
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, it will pull interest from other
CEOs
 and
executives
 to
work
 in the
company
, so the current
CEOs
 and
executives
 will
work
 hard
due to
 high competition for
this
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these
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company
 positions. In conclusion,
CEOs
 and
executives
 have a lot of
challenging
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on
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in
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 their
decision
 and very hard task
on
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 their
work
.
Company
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 should give them
higher
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a higher
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 salary than the other worker as
a rewards
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a reward
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 for their hard
work
, with loads of stress in their decisions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • executive compensation
  • income disparity
  • corporate governance
  • incentive structures
  • ethical considerations
  • competitive advantage
  • demotivation
  • pay structures
  • social inequality
  • talent acquisition
  • company culture
  • economic impact
  • leadership roles
  • employee morale
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