These days, people work in more than one job, and often change career seversl times during their life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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into a perfect career seems to be difficult nowadays as compared to past
time
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times
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. People try new
things
with the
change
in
time
. It is generally seen that
,
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a normal guy
do
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does
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more than one job and after
sometime
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some time
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he
change
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changes
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the entire field.
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essay will present the pros and drawbacks of the given notion.
To begin
it, after the inflation in economics,
things
have changed a lot. It got hard to afford something from the market because of
this
change
.
As a result
,
person
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a person
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do multiple jobs at a
time
to fulfill his
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or
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their family
her family
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family
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needs.
However
,
sometime
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he has to
also
change
the line in order
tto
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to
get money. The most
prefferable
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preferable
benefits
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by
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of
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doing so is,
he
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that he
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can adapt
the
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to the
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changes and can try new
things
everytime
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.
This
things
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thing
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leads the
person
to learn many
things
along with
the pay. As he goes into
new
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a new
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field, he gets to know about new
things
.
For example
, to try something new, many youngsters try to work at different places with
wide
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a wide
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range of rules and regulations.
This
allow
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allows
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them to get into new
things
within a short span of
time
.
In contrast
, It consumes a lot of
time
. If a
person
is
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has been
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working in the same field
from
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for
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a very long
time
and
if
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he
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apply
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has decided to go with the
change
,
than
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then
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at
new
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a new
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place he try new
things
and
to get
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master
in
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apply
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that
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those
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skills, it requires a plenty amount of
time
.
Additionally
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it
also
shows
a
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an
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effect on the income which he gets from one place.
For instance
, If a guy is at
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a senior
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post
than
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then
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he might be earning a high salary. But after some
time
, if he
decide
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to move on with
new
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a new
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thing,
than
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then
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he has to start again from the basic pay.
However
,those who do
this
also
face
problem
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the problem
a problem
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of money after a span of
time
.
To Conclude
, Even though
change
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the change
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in job offers benefits, there are
also
some cons which can't be negotiated at some point.
Moreover
, it
also
depends on the
person
's belief, whether he wants to continue with the same job for his whole life or enjoy the moment by changing it
oftenly
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often
.
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