You recently notice a local restaurant offering a part time job Write a letter to the restaurant’s manager. In your letter •Explain that you would like to apply for this job •Give some details of relevant experience that you have •specify the date and time that would suit for you You should write at least 150 words You don’t write any address

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
this
letter to present my interest in the server post for your restaurant, which you have posted in the local magazine.
However
,
i
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have finished my Diploma in Hospitality
last
year, and now
i
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am keen to work with you
as
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a
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part time
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to express my skills in your restaurant. Let me elaborate
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scenario. When
i
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was pursuing my course,
i
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had to
opt-in
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to
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internship. I have finished my Co-op
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a local bar and
along with
my studies,
i
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worked in a Marriot hotel as a waiter.
Additionally
,
i
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have
also
gained my Smart-Serve Certification and
also
know some basic
technique
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to
woek
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work
in the bar.
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would be grateful
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if you allow me
this
post and give me a chance to present my skills in your restaurant.
Moreover
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am currently enrolled in my Food Handler Certificate, and
this
will end up by next week. So,
i
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will
available
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from 20th March and as
i
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perform some religious activity in the early morning, it would be great if you contact me after 11PM. Thank you for your consideration,
it
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would be grateful
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with you. Yours Sincerely Jay Chawla
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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your purpose for writing. In this case, stating your intention to apply for the server position at the beginning was good. To improve, keep your opening concise and directly responsive to the task prompt for a stronger impression.
coherence cohesion
When detailing your relevant experience, organize your thoughts more clearly by dedicating paragraphs to specific experiences or qualifications. This improves readability and coherence. Each paragraph should introduce a different aspect of your experience, leading the reader smoothly through your qualifications.
task achievement
For a more professional tone, pay attention to minor spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors. For example, 'woek' should be 'work', 'i' should be capitalized ('I'), and proper spacing after commas and periods. Additionally, ensure all tenses are consistent throughout your letter.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your closing paragraph succinctly summarizes your interest and suitability for the position, thanking the reader for considering your application. Your closing was generally well done, but aim for a more formal tone throughout the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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