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The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie chart illustrates the percentage of
Canadian
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Canadians
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 who buy foods in some
resetaurants
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restaurants
 that serve
takeaways
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takeaway
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 choices. Meanwhile, the bar chart shows the
amount
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number
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 of
Indian
restaurants
 that
srpead
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spread
out
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apply
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in
Canada
 from 1960 to 2015.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that Chinese and
Indinian
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Indian
 foods were popular to
takeways
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takeaways
 among
Canadian
,
while
 there was a considerable increase in the number of
Indian
restaurants
 in
Canada
.
Look
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Looking
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 at the details, the
most
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apply
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favourite
takeaways
 in
Canada
was
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were
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 Chinese and
Indianrestaurants
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Indian restaurants
Indian restaurant
 at 34% and 26% respectively.
Furthermore
, more or less 10% of
Canadian
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Canadians
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 bought
takeaways
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takeaway
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 foods in Italian
restauranst
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restaurants
restaurant
 and Persian
restaurants
. Even though
takeaways
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the takeaways
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 service was popular in
Canada
, but there was 11% of
Canadian
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Canadians
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who
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apply
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never used
this
 service. The rest of
10
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the 10
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%
people
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of people
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 in
Canada
 use the service in other
restaurants
. As regards to
bar
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a bar
the bar
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 chart, around 500
Indian
restaurants
 started
open
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opening
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 in 1960 and
this
 number rose considerably to 8000
for
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over
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 40 years. Seven years later, there
was
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were
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 around 9000
Indian
restaurants
 and
this
 figure remained stable until the end of
year
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the year
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 in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canadian, takeaways, indian, restaurants, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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