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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
In
this
 fast modern
life
, there is no doubt about the significance of
science
 and
technology
 and how it plays an important role in our
life
, some people opine that all university students should choose to study the major that suite them,
while
 others opine the contrary, they believe that students should study
subjects
 that help to improve
technology
 and
science
. In
this
essay
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 I would like to discuss both views and I will provide my opinion,
hence
, I will elaborate more on
this
 and offer
exampels
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examples
 to support my argument.
To begin
 with, advocates the necessity of studying
subjects
 like
technology
 and
science
, they believe that only
this
 knowledge will be useful in the future, and they claim that the world
concentrate
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concentrates
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 on
this
 knowledge, because it is the future of all innovations, as they believe that the other
subjects
 like art and history are wasting of time and anyone can read about it or doing it on their free time.
on the other hand
, people who support the concept of choosing any subject in the university to study,
they
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believe that in
this
 new era, the world needs all
spisfics
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specifics
 to enhance their quality of
life
, music
for instance
,
it
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apply
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can not be produced without having knowledge of
technology
,
that is
becase
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because
 music needs a high
ticnichals
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technicals
 and
this
 not going to be done without
technology
 and
science
. In my opinion, I stand with the second opinion which supports the idea of the importance of various
subjects
 in
life
, because I believe that all these
subjects
 should stand together to rich our lives with varieties of
life
.
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  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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