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The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainme Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The figure displays the distribution of monthly revenue across four
categories
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 of expenditure
;
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,
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 namely food and drink, housing, clothing and
entertainment
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 in five European nations, measured in percentage.
Overall
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, the information obviously indicates that the sum of spending on food and drink and housing
are
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is
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 the largest share for all countries, accounting for approximately
a
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apply
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half of all expenses.
While
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people
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 in France, Germany and Spain prefer to spend on
entertainment
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 rather than costumes, Turkey
people
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 do the opposite.
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, the consumption of both
categories
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 by UK
people
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 is in the same proportion. In terms of the main
paying
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spending
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 of
people
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 in each country, only Turkey and Spain allocate the greatest portion of their income to food and drink, accounting for 36% and 31% respectively.
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, the other countries give the first priority to
the
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apply
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housing, with France at 31%, Germany at 33% and
UK
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the UK
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 at 37%.
In addition
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, it is noticeable that the
entertainment
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categories
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 of Germany and Spain are allocated lower than the second largest
categories
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just
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, just
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only
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apply
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3%,
whereas
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 the clothing budgets are approximately
a
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apply
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half of their
entertainment
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 budgets.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, entertainment, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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