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The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visoverall, the highest number of people visited British.

The chart illustrates the number of people from history museums, British museums, national museums and science museums who visoverall, the highest number of people visited British.
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The chart illustrates the
number
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 of
people
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 from
history
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museums
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,
British
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museums
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, national
museums
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 and
science
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museums
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 who visoverall, the highest
number
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 of
people
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 visited
British
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.
overall
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, the highest
number
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 of
people
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 visited
British
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museums
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 compared to other fields
while
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 National
museums
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 account for the lowest proportion in July.
Furthermore
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 in the chart, the
number
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 of
people
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 who visited 4 categories:
History
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museums
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,
British
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museums
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, national
museums
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 and
science
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museums
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 tends to increase. Regarding June, the
number
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 of
people
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 who visited the
Science
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Museum
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 accounted for the highest proportion was 440000
people
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. sequent
British
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museums
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 there are 430000
people
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 to visit.
History
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museums
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 there are 410000
people
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 to visit.
while
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 national
museums
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 accounted for the lowest proportion was 200,000
people
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. In the next 3 months: July, August and 9 trend oscillations. Specifically, the first 2 months of the year the
museum
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science
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 was stable.
In particular
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, the
number
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 of visitors to the
British
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Museum
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 peaked at 720,000. In October, the
history
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museum
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 was reduced to 260,000
people
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. The
British
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Museum
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 plummeted to just 440,000
people
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. The National
Museum
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 decreased slightly to 190000 visitors.
Science
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museums
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 range from 50,000 to 300,000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, history, museums, british, science, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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