The given chart expresses the percentage of 3 groups of people ate 5 servings of fruit and vegetables daily in the United Kingdom over the period of 8 years.

The given chart expresses the percentage of 3 groups of people ate 5 servings of fruit and vegetables daily in the United Kingdom over the period of 8 years.
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The given chart expresses the percentage of 3
groups
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of
people
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ate
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who ate
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5 servings of fruit and vegetables daily in the United Kingdom over the period of 8 years. In general, the proportion of fruit and
vegetables
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vegetable
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consumption
of
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women
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was the highest in
3
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the 3
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groups
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,
whereas
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figure
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the figure
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for
children
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accounted for the lowest ratio.
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, there was a dramatic increase in
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the rate
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of all
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of
people
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consuming these food items over the given period. In 2001, the rate of
children
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,
men
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and
women
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who absorbed 5 portions of fruit and vegetables was 13%, 17% and 21%, respectively. In the next 2 years, the
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children
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men
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remained steady
while
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the proportion of
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women
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consumption saw an upward trend. There was a growing tendency in all
groups
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people
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over the time till 2006, the
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men
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women
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hit the highest point of 27% and 35%, respectively
while
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the ratio of
women
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eating food servings went down by 33% and the
figure
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men
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remained stable in 2007. In 2008, a slight fall was seen in whole 3
groups
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of
people
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.
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, the
figure
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women
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accounted for the largest rate at 30% in
groups
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of
people
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while
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figure
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the figure
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for
men
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and
children
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was 26% and 24%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, people, women, figure, children, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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