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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

#city #traffic #congestion
The widespread problem of
traffic
 congestion has long been a major topic of concern in society.
This
 essay will discuss what are the causes and suggest ways in which
this
 problem can be reduced. The first potential cause is overpopulation.
In other words
, the number of
people
 is increasing day by day.
Consequently
, the percentage of individuals who use private
transport
such
 as
car
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cars
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 is raising, which can be defined as the main reason
of
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for
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traffic
jam
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jams
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. To resolve
this
 obstacle the government has to implement some projects like “One family – one
car
.”.
For instance
, nowadays not only parents drive a
car
 but
also
 their offspring, for one family it would be better to have only one
transport
, other members can use public
transport
.
Thus
, city dwellers
also
 may play their part to mitigate
traffic
 congestion. Another possible reason is the inconvenience of the public
transport
 like lack of air conditioning or enough sits. Especially after
work
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people
 get exhausted and in order to avoid these things individuals tend to purchase
own
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their own
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car
. Yet, rarely do
people
 realize that
such
 kind of approach costs
their
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them
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 time when they get stuck in a
traffic
 jam.
Nevertheless
, what the state can do to solve
this
 trend is to arouse
people
’s interest in using
the
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social
transport
 by providing more comfortable and clean buses with many sits.
Nonetheless
, I am still convinced that it is the authorities’ prime responsibility to make the environment more comfortable for
people
 who do not use
car
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a car
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 or can not afford it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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