Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Agree or disagree?

There is an extremist view over the
activities
children do in their free
time
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necessarily educational, If not,
such
pastimes are said to be a mere waste of
time
. My opinion is
leisure
activities
could, not must, nor should be educationally beneficial. If, and only if, those recreational
activities
are
fun
, they are to have beneficial effects on the kids' upbringing. Children, as humans, like us, adults, need joy.
Leisure
activities
, as it comes from the name, are supposed to provide jubilation to their lives. Studying
time
is to provide knowledge, Sports are to improve strong muscles, and
leisure
activities
to
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rest and relax their minds. It is the best for each to attain its prospective goal. The other way around, I'd inquire, is it a must for the theoretical classes in schools to be physically developing? The answer is 'no', yet, it does not convey the message that
such
non-related results hurt.
As a result
of what
discussed
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here, as long as
the
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leisure
is
leisure
it is up to its aim. Being educationally beneficial does not sway it one way or another. Beyond joy, it is good to supply
education
into
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the
leisure
time
.
However
, distraction might cause the aim to digress from its
origion
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origin
. As soon as the little ones notice that there is an
aducationally
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educationally
educational
persuasive plan behind the scene, all the promised joy could be spoiled at once.
As a result
, if the educational authorities want to be conservative, it is recommended not
having
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education
pre-planned. One visible merit of 'having
leisure
activities
planned 100%
fun
' is to concentrate to the maximum level to achieve
enjoy
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, and
that is
what makes it purely original. In conclusion,
fun
is the crucial factor in designing
leisure
activities
, not
education
,
nor
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anything else. Not only is it not a waste of
time
to exclude
education
, but
also
behind-the-scene-lessons
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might distract and
consequently
ruin all the
promissed
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promised
fun
out of the pleasure.
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