The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is widely believed that salary is the key factor in selecting a
job
. In my opinion, while
income is important to sustain a
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life
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satisfaction is equally
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an equally
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essay will explain the details of my views.
There is no doubt that most of
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people
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payrolls
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the rising
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mean
people
will be able to live a more comfortable life
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a vacation
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life
and bring happiness not just to that person, but also
to the family members. But money is not the only important aspect when it comes to choosing a job
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complete, because these acts would be extremely rewarding.
To sum up
, I certainly believe that both salary scale and job
satisfaction are equally important factors which need to be given equal thought before someone pursue
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite