The bar chart below shows the results of a survey conducted by a personnel department at a major company. The survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those aged from 18-30 and those aged 45-60, and shows factors affecting their work performance.
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age
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groups
on the Use synonyms
factors
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make
their environment pleasant for working.
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are team spirit, Use synonyms
competent
boss, respect from colleagues and Correct article usage
a competent
job
satisfaction. The external Use synonyms
factors
are chance for personal development, Use synonyms
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security, promotional prospects and money.
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age
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groups
agreed that team spirit, competent boss and Use synonyms
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satisfaction are essential to make their environment pleasant. Use synonyms
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, there are contrasting results. On the chance for personal development and promotional aspects, 80% to 90% of the younger Use synonyms
groups
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said it is essential.
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while
they had dissimilar responses on the external Linking Words
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