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The line graph illustrates the usage of four different types of proteins in a European nation from 1979 to 2004.

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, through the course /of 25 years, chicken witnessed a continuous increase in the consumption rate

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beef, lamb and fish all experienced a downward trend. In 1979, chicken commenced at around 150

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consumed per person every week. During the observed period,

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poultry showed some fluctuations but, it reached its peak at nearly 250

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for each person per week in 2004. Interestingly,

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it started as the second most popular protein option, chicken became the protein

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chosen the most 25 years later.

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was the type of meat being eaten the most in 1979, at about 200

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, fish and lamb were recorded at approximately 50 and 150

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respectively. In 2004,

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the consumption amount of fish remained unchanged, beef and lamb all witnessed a significant decrease to

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200 and 70

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sequentially.

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Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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162 words

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