The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different places in Bangkok. Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different places in Bangkok.

Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the proportions of visitors who travelled to various place attractions in Bangkok from 2014 to 2017.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the four places experienced fluctuations during the period.
To begin
, the same patterns are depicted at
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Museum and
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Town where both of them increased
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the beginning of two years and dropped after that. The travellers of Wax Museum accounted for around 45 per cent in 2014 and steadily increased until reached a peak at 80% in 2016. It fell to seven in ten in the final year but still became the majority
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the other places.
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, China Town had a similarity
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it rose to just below 100% in 2016 as the main location
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tourists to visit, yet it declined significantly until its low at one in ten in the next year. The oscillations
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in Bangkok Zoo and Sea World between 2014 and 2016 when both of them decreased dramatically in
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2015 and soared slightly again to almost a third and a half respectively. In the next year, the areas declined tremendously by more than half.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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