The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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as illustrated in the first picture,

paradise

island

in the past consisted of a lot of things. if clarify, natural spring

which

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apply

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was almost in the middle. rocks which

was

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were

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on the opposite side of the beach. there were palms in the middle near the natural spring.

scientitic

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scientific

research station was near the beach. there were

also

a pier and a boat to travel the sea.

also

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,also

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paradise

was occupied by the sea. the second picture gives information on

the

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apply

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paradise

island

now and what it consists of. it consists

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of a

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lot of features;

for example

cafe

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a cafe

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, hotel complex, open restaurant, cycle path and swimming pool.

open

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the open

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restaurant is in the middle of

this

island

swimming

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the swimming

a swimming

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pool is near the hotel complex, which is the main part of

this

island

. the

island

is occupied by the sea. there is

also

a cruise ship for people to travel.

additionally

, there are rocks around the

island

overall

paradise

island

now consists of more places [to

entartain

Correct your spelling

entertain

people ] rather than it was in the past

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
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10Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

173 words

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