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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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as illustrated in the first picture,
paradise
island
 in the past consisted of a lot of things. if clarify, natural spring
which
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was almost in the middle. rocks which
was
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were
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 on the opposite side of the beach. there were palms in the middle near the natural spring.
scientitic
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scientific
 research station was near the beach. there were
also
 a pier and a boat to travel the sea.
also
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paradise
 was occupied by the sea. the second picture gives information on
the
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paradise
island
 now and what it consists of. it consists
a
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of a
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lot of features;
for example
,
cafe
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a cafe
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, hotel complex, open restaurant, cycle path and swimming pool.
open
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the open
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 restaurant is in the middle of
this
island
.
swimming
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the swimming
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 pool is near the hotel complex, which is the main part of
this
island
. the
island
 is occupied by the sea. there is
also
 a cruise ship for people to travel.
additionally
, there are rocks around the
island
overall
,
paradise
island
 now consists of more places [to
entartain
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entertain
 people ] rather than it was in the past
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