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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates
expenditure
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the expenditure
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 of
average
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the average
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 family in one week using
percentage
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a percentage
the percentage
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 of their weekly income, compared to two different
year
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years
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 which is apart fifty years. At
the
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apply
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first glance, almost all of them have changed considerably in
this
 given period. It is crystal clear to see that,
figure
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the figure
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of
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for
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 food accounted
35
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for 35
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percent
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per cent
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 which is
top
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a top
the top
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 expense in 1968,
however
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,however
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 it decreased to
exact
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exactly
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 two times in
following
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a following
the following
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 year.
On the contrary
, leisure was one of
lowest
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the lowest
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 in
first
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the first
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 year in the information, it successfully hit
the
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apply
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first place in 2018 ( 9 to 22 per cent).
Moreover
, we can
also
 see that
,
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 housing and transport spending rise 9 and 6 per cent, respectively.
On the other hand
, there
is
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are
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also
 downgrading trends.
Such
 as
,
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 fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
,
personal
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and personal
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 good, each of them
are
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is
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 declined
less
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by less
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 than 5
percent
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per cent
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 by 2018.
Furthermore
, household goods
is
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remained constant
during
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for
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 fifty years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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