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The chart below show the proportion of businesses making e commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015and 2019

The chart below show the proportion of businesses making e commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015and 2019
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The bar chart given illustrates the 5 kinds of businesses (manufacturing, construction, wholesale, retail, information and communication) doing
e-commerce
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 purchases by manufacturing from 2015 to 2019 in Canada
overall
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, starting from the first period given almost all of the businesses tended to the same figure in the Proportion of making
e-commerce
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 purchases, only manufacturing and information & communication had the fluctuating proportion in 2019. Turning to the details it is evident that manufacturing bought at about 30 %
e-commerce
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 in 2015,
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 increased to 50 % after that dropped to 40 % and 50% in 2017 and 2018 respectively before elevating to 58 % in 2019.
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 manufacturing, information and communication had not shown a significant change in
e-commerce
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 spend just only 60 % in 2015 and
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 rose by 15 % in 2017 before falling slightly to 70 %
at the end
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 of the time given
On the other hand
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, construction and retail showed a similar trend. In 2015
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 construction purchased about 22% of
e-commerce
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 retail spending far more than 32 %;
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 both of them show an increase in the percentage at the
last
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 of the period of approximately 55 %.
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, wholesale grew up slightly to almost 40 % in 2015 and enhanced by about 21 % until 2019

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Vocabulary: Replace the words e-commerce with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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