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The bar charts compare the relation of the British result in a survey in three separate regions of the UK about the decision of house in four categories in 2009.

The bar charts compare the relation of the British result in a survey in three separate regions of the UK about the decision of house in four categories in 2009.
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The bar chart demonstrates the proportion of housing preferences of UK citizens in three different areas, namely
Liverpool
,
London
 and
Manchester
 in 2009.
Overall
,
Liverpool
 citizens are more interested in apartments
whereas
 people in
London
 and
Manchester
 preferred semi-detached
houses
 most.
To begin
 with, nearly two-thirds (59%) of the population in
Liverpool
 love living in apartments. Meanwhile, the
London
 dwellers slightly outnumbered
Manchester
 dwellers in terms of
apartments
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apartment
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 preference, with respective figures being 29% and 19%. Turning to terraced
houses
 used by UK people, the figure for that in
London
 stood at 19%, followed by
Manchester
 with 12% and
Liverpool
 with 9%. Regarding the remaining categories, the proportion of detached
houses
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house
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 users in
Manchester
 was nearly a
third,
which was nearly 2 times higher than that of
Liverpool
. Meanwhile, similarities can
also
 be witnessed in the figure for
London
 and
Manchester
 in semi-detached
houses
, which were approximately 38%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words liverpool, london, manchester, houses with synonyms.
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