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Band 5.5

The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.

The maps below show how a coastal town developed between 1950 and 2007.
The maps illustrate the development of a town called Coastal from 1950 to 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there were many buildings were built and replaced the grassland in the year 2007.
According to
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 the first map, there was a sea in the north and
had
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the
Correct article usage
a
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 road to the south. On the left side of the sea, an industrial area was there and the opposite was the car park.
Moreover
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, the lands in the south
was
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were
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 covered by grassland. Moving on to the next map,
comparing
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compared
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 to the year 1959, there are significant changes. Starting from the north,
yacht
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a yacht
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 marina was created in the sea surrounded by
road
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a road
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 with some apartments. The industrial area was developed to be a park, swimming pool, and multi-storey car park. Another noticeable improvement was grassland, demolished and replaced by shops,
cinema
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cinemas
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, and various
of
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apply
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houses.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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