The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
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The shown chart provides information about the amount of spending in the four nations (United States,
Canada
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, the United Kingdom, and Japan), split by five basic needs (food, housing, transportation, health care, and clothing) in 2009.
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, people in mentioned countries spent the most on housing,
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the least amount was on health care. To start with, the highest expenses of people in those nations was in housing, which the United States spent more than the other countries, namely just over a quarter,
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the lowest spending was in
Canada
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at around 20%.
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, people
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spent much on food and transportation, where the highest was in the United Kingdom at well over 20% and
Canada
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at exactly 20%, respectively. Turning to the remaining categories, the average spending for clothing was only less than 10% with the highest was
Canada
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at around 5%.
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, the expenditure for health care was only less than 5% with the lowest being the United Kingdom, which stood at around 35,
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the highest was the United States, which reached approximately 8%.
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