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Some people think that traditional games are better than modern games in helping children develop their abilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 modern life, new
games
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 have become to increase, some people opine that traditional old
games
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 are more beneficial than video
games
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, and they have a significant role to enhance their abilities. In my opinion, I agree with
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 concept. In
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 essay, I would like to prevent my opinion and elaborate more on
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 by giving examples to support my argument.
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 with, I believe that new technology
games
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 have many negative impacts on
kids
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, one of them the interactive problems, it is very clear that these
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 do not provide physical activities
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 as running and jumping,
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 the
kids
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 stay for a long time in front of the screen, and that cause a various problem
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 as low vision and many psychological issues like depression and anxiety.
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, traditional
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 depend on physical actions and interaction with others, which help the
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 to improve their abilities to move and teach them about several types of social skills like how to accept defeat, and how to talk with others, all these activities help
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 to understand the world in a better way.
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, nowadays parents can not prevent their
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 to play video
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, but they can reduce the hours of playing,
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, they can replace video
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 with physical activities to ensure that they will grow up in a healthy environment, away from new technology problems.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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