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Many university students want to learn about different subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others feel it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for their qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
students
 intend to get knowledge about other
subjects
besides
 their major ones
whereas
 others claim that being professional only in the
field
 of their study is more essential.
While
 being involved in different aspects of sciences might be very useful to some extent, I hold the view that the benefits of putting all attention and effort into main
subjects
 overweight. On the one hand, being interested in various
subjects
 lead
students
 to search for new information on a regular base which keeps them updated.
Therefore
, learning different
subjects
 might have a positive effect on studying their main courses.
For instance
, engineering
students
 have lots of technical
subjects
 to learn and plenty of calculations they do during their studying period. Adding some humanitarian
subjects
such
 as, any foreign language or
subjects
 which are related to psychology might help them to clear their mind and improve their concentration on the most substantial tasks later.
On the other hand
, adding extra courses which are not necessary for their future career can be distracting to some extent. University
students
 may experience confusion about the priority of
subjects
. To support
this
 idea, the majority of
students
 struggle to start their careers because of the lack of background knowledge studied at university.
Instead
 of focusing on their main
subjects
 and enrolling on some extra courses related to their major
field
, they spend
this
 time getting information that they will not remember after a
while
.
Thus
, concentrating on their priorities by acknowledging one
field
 might be more beneficial rather than spending time on other
subjects
. In conclusion, despite the fact that some
students
 have a positive approach to getting knowledge in different
subjects
, I strongly believe that being sufficiently successful in a major
field
 is the top of the priorities.
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