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Task 1: The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Task 1: The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph below compared the percentage of recyclable power in the total power supply in 4 particular countries over the period from 1997 to 2010.
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 Iceland was the country that has much
energy
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 renewable compared to another three countries.
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, stood in the second stage is Turkey which has a higher
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 renewable resources than Sweden and Australia. In Iceland, the figures for renewable
energy
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 in summary
energy
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 supply increased dramatically over
this
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 period. Peaking at approximately 45
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 in 1997, after that 3 years raised to 60
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,
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 reached 70
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at the end
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 year of the survey. Sweden and Iceland acted
similarly
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, growing up all year of the survey.
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, the number of power in Sweden remained at less than 10
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 in the
last
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 year. In comparison, the percentage of renewable
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 in the supply areas in Turkey fluctuated a little over these 13 years and peaked at more than 30
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 in 2010.
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, in Australia, the figure for recyclable
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 decreased steadily
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 and surged to under 5
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 in 2010.
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