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The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment.
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The provided table describes four categories of monthly
household
income
, including food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment, among five European countries:
France
,
Germany
, The United Kingdom, Turkey, and Spain. The
income
 is measured in percentages. From the table, it can be observed that the
household
income
 trends in
France
,
Germany
, and the UK are similar. The majority of
household
income
 is from housing, at slightly over 30% for all previously mentioned countries.
Furthermore
, both
France
 and
Germany
 gain the lowest amount of
income
 from clothing, with only 7% of
total
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 in
France
, and 15% of
total
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 in
Germany
. Meanwhile, in the UK, not only clothing but
also
 entertainment
income
 proportion are only 11% of
total
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 each.
On the other hand
, food and drink
income
 in Turkey and Spain are highest among other categories of
household
, accounting for 36% and 31% of
total
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, respectively.
Moreover
, in Turkey, only 10% of
income
 is from
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entertainment,
while
 in Spain the clothing
income
 is only 8%.
Overall
, it can be summarized that each country in Europe has a distinct proportion of
household
income
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words household, income, france, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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