Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people believe that
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an increasing in university tuition and decreasing in job opportunities for graduated
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, it would be better for universities to remove
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as philosophy, and history from the curriculum.
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, the university should
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focus solely on the degree
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in which
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will obtain high opportunities to be employed. I totally disagree with
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with, it might be reasonable for some to believe that
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should concentrate on the subjects which directly benefit from the job positions,
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finance, marketing, and supply chain, as
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will be able to adapt easily when they start working in a company.
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is probably because many jobs these days are solely
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for
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who study in relevant majors, and companies
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have high expectations from graduated
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.
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, when I applied for a business analyst position, I found that most companies only considered applicants who graduated in business-related fields.
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, after being employed they believe that I am able to work smoothly without requiring training by utilising my knowledge from previous subjects that I have studied.
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, I personally believe that each student has distinguished talents, which means that not all
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will be capable to learn the aforementioned
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some are good at arithmetic, others
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in
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or music.
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, there are numerous jobs in the real world, where artists and musicians
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have a place. Assuming that only business
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are taught in the universities,
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, music, and many other fields will
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from our nation’s cultures and festivals because no one excels in these areas anymore. In conclusion,
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the degree
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are essential for
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for employment, I am of the opinion that removing
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subjects is not a valid method for solving
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