In many parts of the world,families were larger in the past becouse people had more children.Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past .

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In the

past

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almost every family was very large in the world

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every family wanting to be a lot of offspring .They thought

children

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bring happiness to every single family and

that is

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why they love numerous

heir

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. In ancient

time

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times

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every family member love a new baby and

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why each family had at least five

children

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. I think it was beneficial for everyone at that time they taught

children

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to save their

family

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families

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and they

also

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thought that it would give them luck.For ,example Uzbek family really liked than other countries.And in the past each Uzbek family had at least 8 or 9 family members and these families considered themselves very happy .

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the fact that

had

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ample

children

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had not happened any divorce.Because they had numerous

children

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that is

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why mothers could not go anywhere.

this

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action

just

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amazing

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than now.Having many

children

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was considered the happiness of families.But ,

unfortunately

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nowadays almost everyone wants to be having only one or two

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/Because

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apply

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nowadays

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parents do not like

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countless

children

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everything change now

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to divorces

are

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increasing day by day. I believe many change everything now and it is to our detriment.

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one of the parents is busy now and they can spend a lot of time with

themself

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their

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children

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and the

child

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also

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single and it is too much damage for the

children

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to grow. If a

child

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is only single that

child

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grows happy

naughty

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because that

child

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girl or boy grows up single

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why he or she can not speak with people .And he or she does not feel like childhood .,Namely if we compare

children

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who grew up with many or only one single , many grown-up

children

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get along very well with everyone and

also

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they could argue with themselves sisters and brothers and they could feel themselves childhood .

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growing up single

person

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people

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can not get

well

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along well

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with other people and they could not have any feelings like childhood because they grow up without any nither sisters or brothers. in my ,

conculation

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consultation

if every parent wants to live without quarrels and they want to be happy than others they should have at least three or four

children

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

377 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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