The graph below shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of academic employees based on gender in the university in 2012.
Overall
,
it is clear that
mostly
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most
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men worked in the
faculties
of engineering, business, law, and science,
while
the opposite became the majority in the arts and
medicine
, and
medicine
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the medicine
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departement
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department
had a roughly similar number.
To begin
, male
staffs
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staff
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in the engineering
faculties
stood at above four-fifths, which
were
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was
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the highest of the other
faculties
,
while
female members were just below 20 per cent.
Similarly
, there were more men employees in the three
faculties
(business, law, and science) than women in
this
period, in which they were approximately 60%.
On the other hand
,
female
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females
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who worked as
staffs
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staff
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in the arts and
medicine
had
more
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a more
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significicant
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significant
number than
male
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males
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,
accounted
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accounting
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for 58% and 72% respectively. Meanwhile, employees in the
medicine
subjects
did not have no
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did not have any
had no
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many differences in number based on gender, which men staffs were higher slightly than women.
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