The graph shows the rate of smoking among men and women in Somaliland

The graph shows the rate of smoking among men and women in Somaliland
The line chart illustrates the number of
smokers
in Somaliland based on gender from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that men had more
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preference to smoke than women, and the trend of male
smokers
showed a decrease,
while
there was a significant increase in the opposite.
To begin
, around 600
thousand
of
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men became
smokers
in 1960,
were
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the majority in that period, dropping gradually to a low of below 300
thousand
for the next four decades.
In contrast
, women witnessed an upward trend over the period, starting at 100
thousand
in 1960,
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dramatically until reach a peak at 300
thousand
in 1975. Suddenly, the growth of female
smokers
began to fall by 100
thousand
in the final year, having a
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lower number than men.
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