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the following diagrams show a pellet stove and a pellet boiler work to heat a house. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the following diagrams show a pellet stove and a pellet boiler work to heat a house. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided flow chart enumerates the way in which the pellet stove and the boiler work to warm the building.
Overall
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 ,there are six stages in the whole house heating process ,beginning with throwing wood
pellets
Use synonyms
 to
fuel
Correct article usage
a fuel
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 hopper and ending with the heat of rooms.
To begin
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, the wood
pellets
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is
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are
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 used to heat the house is placing from bag to hopper.
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This
Correct determiner usage
These
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 wooden
pellets
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is
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are
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then
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 placed to fuel feed,which is used to burn the wood
pellets
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. The burn
pellets
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goes
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go
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 to
Use synonyms
ash
Correct article usage
the ash
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 pan.
Following
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this
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, the combustion chamber
used
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is used
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 to send the heat to
combustion
Correct article usage
the combustion
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 fan. controls assist in
this
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 process
,
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apply
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and
then
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releases
Correct subject-verb agreement
release
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 hot air. In the subsequent stage, the cold
water
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 goes through
furnace
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the furnace
a furnace
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 ,
next
Correct word choice
and
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 the cold
water
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 heats into hot
water
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.
Ash
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 goes through
Use synonyms
ash
Correct article usage
the ash
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 pan to
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ash
Correct article usage
the ash
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 receptacle.
Finally
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, the hot
water
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 is sent to batteries, and delivered to their destinations and burn
pellets
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 release emissions to
smoke
Correct article usage
the smoke
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 stack.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pellets, ash, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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