IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

The pictures illustrate the change of park in 1985 and now.

#pictures #change #park
The given two maps compare the situation of
Park
 in 1980 and at present.
Overall
, It can be clearly seen from the map that to increase the number of visitors to the
park
, It has been developed in some aspects
such
 as adding a comfortable resting
place
 with new chairs, a desk and a barbecue. Turning to the major details,in 1980 there were two opportunities to enter the
park
 for visitors,
however
,by today,
this
 position is extended
that is
 4 main gates are located on every side of the
park
. The
place
 of woodland which is located on the northeast side of the
park
 added a special
place
that is
 a resting
place
 for people with new chairs, desks and a barbecue. There is only one unchanged
place
 the
place
 of the pound and branch,It is sited near the centre of the
park
. The flower gardens which lie in the south-east and west side of the
park
 have been removed to bush and playground for children.
Submitted by ieltsteaching0 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: