Nowadays, children spend too much time watching TV and playing computer games. Some people believe this has negative effects on children's mental abilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Spending
time
Use synonyms
on
watching Change preposition
apply
television
, watching Use synonyms
Use synonyms
video
, and playing computer Fix the agreement mistake
videos
games
is valuable for kids. Use synonyms
However
, others said that Linking Words
this
can be negative Linking Words
affects
Correct your spelling
effects
for
Change preposition
on
children
. In Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
essay
I will explain the opinions from both Add a comma
,essay
point
of Change to a plural noun
points
views
.
Playing Fix the agreement mistake
view
video
Use synonyms
games
, watching Use synonyms
movie
, and watching Fix the agreement mistake
movies
television
could be advantageous for Use synonyms
child
. It is because they can learn, improve their self, and Fix the agreement mistake
children
sharp
their logical thinking from that platforms. They can spend the Replace the word
sharpen
time
Use synonyms
by
watching the Change preposition
apply
video
or Use synonyms
television
as Use synonyms
the
self-learning platforms and get Correct article usage
apply
the
points or messages from what they see, hear, and do. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, Linking Words
children
can use YouTube (Use synonyms
video
streaming platform) to learn and improve Use synonyms
the
English skill by watchingChange the word
their
,
and hearing and they can imitate the pronunciation from the native speaker who Remove the comma
apply
teach
or upload the Change the verb form
teaches
video
Use synonyms
in
YouTube. Change preposition
on
Moreover
, they can advance their logical thinking by playing brain exercise Linking Words
video
Use synonyms
games
to solve Use synonyms
the
problems.
Correct article usage
apply
However
, allocating Linking Words
time
for having fun Use synonyms
to watch
the Change the verb form
watching
television
, Use synonyms
video
, and Use synonyms
play
computer Wrong verb form
playing
games
Use synonyms
also
gives drawback effects for kindergartens. It can make Linking Words
they
are to be lazy, easy to get angry or Correct pronoun usage
them
Add a missing verb
have tantrum
tantrum
. When Fix the agreement mistake
tantrums
children
feel comfortable with Use synonyms
Linking Words
this
Correct determiner usage
these
activities
-they will spend more Use synonyms
time
and Use synonyms
do
not do other or important Unnecessary verb
apply
activities
(Use synonyms
such
as doing homework, taking a bath, or eating)-Linking Words
as a
Linking Words
result
they will be lazy. Add a comma
,result
Additionally
, when the parents give Linking Words
instruction
to stop Fix the agreement mistake
instructions
they
Correct your spelling
the
activities
for spending Use synonyms
time
with those Use synonyms
activities
, they will avoid it and will Use synonyms
angry
if the parents interrupt it.
In summary, I agree that spending Add a missing verb
be angry
time
Use synonyms
with
watching the Change preposition
apply
television
, Use synonyms
video
, and playing Use synonyms
games
Use synonyms
for
Change preposition
with
childrens
can Correct your spelling
children
effect
their cognitive functions in their brain Correct your spelling
affect
due to
the fact that the brain is a main role Linking Words
of
Change preposition
in
the
intelligence and physical Correct article usage
apply
activities
. Use synonyms
However
, we should help Linking Words
children
's mental abilities through various Use synonyms
of
methods with fun and effective ways, which are watching TV and playing computer Change preposition
apply
games
can be alternative solutions.Use synonyms
Submitted by frens on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.