Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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working in a
company
apparently. Even though people who
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as an employee have
career
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ladder, there are more
opportunity
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building
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self-employed
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working environment.
However
,
this
essay will explain the cause and the drawbacks of
this
phenomenon. The main cause of it is individuals often got too much pressure from their supervisor as they give tasks with short
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.
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,
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did not
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really
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employers
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mental health and well-being.
For example
, in a certain finance
company
, the workforces have to
work
until midnight or more to achieve
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target.
Consequently
, the workforces often get sick and can lead to mental disorder.
Thus
, with
this
kind of high pressure from the
company
, many people choose to have more flexible jobs.
On the other hand
, because
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flexibility,
this
decision
also
has
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in
mangement
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management
things. The first is a person's time management skill will be challenged. Even though there
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no specific working hours for persons who
work
as
freelancer
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a freelancer
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or small business owner, sometimes they will face
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situations.
In addition
,
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self-employed persons will face hard situations managing their money
also
.
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, the freelancers did not
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a specific number of client, so sometimes they could
gained
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more than a thousand dollars and in the next month they gained less than five hundred dollars per month.
Hence
, the unspecific amount of projects or euphoria from their markets makes them living in an
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life. In conclusion,
individuals
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decision to switch from working in
company
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the company
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to
self-employed
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being self-employed
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is affected by the huge pressure of
work load
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. Meanwhile, it has a
demerrit
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demerit
which is there
is
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no specific working hours for persons who
work
as
freelancer
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a freelancer
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or small business owner, and they ought to manage their own time in order to keep the balance in their life
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  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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