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The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates consumption of three kinds of fast food by teenagers in Mauritius from 1985 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart depicted that adolescents consumed three types of junk food in Mauritius for 30 years.
Overall
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, the young generation's consumption of hamburgers and pizza mostly increased dramatically in Mauritius over the years.
In contrast
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, the figures for fried chicken consumers went down sharply in the final
year
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. In 1985, fried chicken which was the lowest level of consumption started with the data at 5
times
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 per
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 in Mauritius.
Then
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,
this
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 statistic had a remarkable increase to 60
times
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 in 2005, the youth consumed gradually to nearly 62
times
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 in 2015, it was changed slightly compared to 2005. Following the upward trend, beginning at 10
times
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 per
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 eating hamburgers in 1985 and after that, teenagers made the data reached a peak significantly at approximately 71
times
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 per
year
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 in 2015.
On the contrary
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, the consumption of pizza was on the top at 60
times
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 in 1985, the Mauritian young people were no longer keen on pizza,
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, the data decreased strongly to 10
times
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year
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 in 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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