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A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

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I hope you and your family
well
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are well
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 . I am glad to hear that from you . You are going on
camping
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a camping
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 holiday for the first time
this
 summer . You will enjoy
this
 summer
also
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and also
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 many of fun there . I would like to suggest
a places
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places
a place
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 you will have a good holiday
firstly
, visit
jeje
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Jeje
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 island which is located near your camping
this
 area some of
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the tourest
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tourest
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tourist
tourists
 happy there and enjoying
with
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themselves with
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 their family .
Secondly
, going to fishing
it
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apply
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is really good for
relax
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relaxation
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However
 , you could swimming with your children as well . I would like to remind you as you are in
camping
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the camping
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 area provide some equipment
for
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to
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 protect
youself
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yourself
. I
heared
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heard
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 there are many animals
moreover
, bring lotions for mosquitoes
especially
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,especially
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 during the night . Take care of yourself . I hope
and
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you and
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 your family enjoy Yours faithfully ,
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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