A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

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I hope you and your family

well

Add a missing verb

are well

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. I am glad to hear that from you . You are going on

camping

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a camping

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holiday for the first time

this

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summer . You will enjoy

this

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summer

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also

Correct word choice

and also

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many of fun there . I would like to suggest

a places

Correct the article-noun agreement

places

a place

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you will have a good holiday

firstly

Linking Words

, visit

jeje

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Jeje

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island which is located near your camping

this

Linking Words

area some of

Correct article usage

the tourest

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tourest

Correct your spelling

tourist

tourists

happy there and enjoying

with

Correct pronoun usage

themselves with

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their family .

Secondly

Linking Words

, going to fishing

Correct pronoun usage

apply

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is really good for

relax

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relaxation

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However

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, you could swimming with your children as well . I would like to remind you as you are in

camping

Correct article usage

the camping

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area provide some equipment

for

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protect

youself

Correct your spelling

yourself

. I

heared

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heard

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there are many animals

moreover

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, bring lotions for mosquitoes

especially

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,especially

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during the night . Take care of yourself . I hope

and

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you and

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your family enjoy Yours faithfully ,

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

147 words

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The Greeting

These days, many people choose to work online. Is this a positive development? Do you think there are disadvantages of working online?

The picture shows the rates of smoking in Someland by men and women. Summerise key features and information where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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