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The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.

The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.
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The line graph shows data on the natality rate among adult females in England between 1973 and 2020. It is measured in
births
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 per hundred women.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the aged under 20 and aged 40 plus followed a similar pattern and aged 28- 34 has the highest number of
births
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 per hundred women.
To begin
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 with, women aged under 20 and aged 40+ both stood at 20
births
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 per hundred in 1973.
Then
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, aged under 20 saw a gradual decrease from 1980 to 2001 and slightly increased to about 22
births
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at the end
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 of the year. The aged 40 plus steadily declined in the remaining years and ended at about 5 per birth in 2020.
Next,
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aged 28-34 was at 20 at the beginning of the year which later grew rapidly to around 50 per birth in 1980. After that, the aged 28 -34 reduced slowly in 1993 and eventually rose minimally between 2001 and 2008 to 60.
However
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, there was a sharp growth in 2020 at 80 per aged.
Subsequently
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, aged 20-25 started at 120 per aged in 1973 and experienced a dramatic fall in the following years to about 25.
In contrast
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 , it ended at 20
at the end
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 of the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words births with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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