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Human activities have negative effects on plants and animal species . Some people think that it is too late to do anything about this problem . Other people believe that effective measures can be taken to improve this situation . Discuss both views and give your opinion .

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Studying Service Design MA at the Royal College of Art holds tremendous promise for my personal and professional growth.
This
 postgraduate program will equip me with the necessary knowledge to make a significant impact in two aspects: innovating the local creative system and supporting the nation in addressing environmental and population challenges. As an amateur writer, I have witnessed firsthand the predicament faced by creators in adapting to new technology and societal changes.
This
 has fueled my motivation to innovate the local creative system, ensuring that creators have the tools and opportunities to thrive in the rapidly evolving landscape.
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participant
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 in a project about track and stray dog neutering has stimulated me to dedicate
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balance
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 the
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environment
 and inhabitants. The institution offers a unique opportunity to merge my passion for writing, my dedication to supporting creators, and my commitment to environmental and population issues. Through
this
 program, I will gain the necessary expertise and network to make a meaningful impact in these areas. I am grateful for the scholarship consideration and excited about the prospect of realizing my vision for a more innovative, sustainable, and inclusive future.
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