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The plans below show the layout of a university´s centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps illustrate the current design of a university´s
sports
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centre
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 versus how it is planned to be after redevelopment.
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, the main changes include
re-usage
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the re-usage
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 (outdoor courts) of buildings, and expansion of the gym area,
whereas
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 it is scheduled to add more services
such
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 as a café, a shop and changing rooms. The present layout of the
sports
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centre
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 consists of three separate buildings, one main and two outdoor courts. The most significant change to the out façade of the
centre
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 will include joining these buildings together;
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, both courts will soon be repurposed to become a leisure pool on the west and a
sports
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 hall on the east side of the main building. Another thing worth mentioning is that the gym is today quite small, but as soon as the university rearranges the building, the gym can be expanded. The
sports
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centre
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 is
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 planning to add more services to their facility in the near future.
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, on each corner on the second map (
south-west
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southwest
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 and
south-east
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southeast
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), it will be constructed changing rooms,
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 in between these changing rooms, it will be opened both a café and
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sports
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a sports
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 shop close to the main entrance.
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, for all dance lovers, are happy to announce that they can soon use two brand new dance studios next
sports
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 hall.

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