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In recent years there has been an increase in bad behaviour , poor discipline and anti-social behaviour in schools.Tough measures and stricter punishments by schools ,parents and others are necessary to stop this trand. What are the advantages and disadvantages of stricter discipline for young people?.Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the past few ,years it has become more and more increasing bad behaviour and no discipline in schools.If we continue to let happen
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 bad behaviour in schools the consequences will be enormous.seminary, parents and others have a responsibility to change
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 trend. Young people are very easy to imitate someone when they were young , their parents should teach them some discipline before they go to school. Stricter punishments are required sometimes ,for the pupils.In some ,schools some pupils are doing make noise during lecture time , and the teacher let them stay out holding the books and giving them as a punishment so that they got shy and won't do it again.In some case , someone steals money from others , the administration put the paper on his neck and write down I am a theft and show him in the village, so that he won't do it again.
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