Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic, and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

It is true that traffic congestion and pollution have become a serious problem in metropolises and cities. To solve
this
problem, an increase in the
petrol’s
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price
is suggested. I think
this
solution is not the best
way
, and in my
opinion
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there are other solutions that are more effective than increasing petrol’s
price
.
To begin
with, rising
fuel
prices might lead to some negative effects.
Firstly
,
generally
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people are willing to buy a car for themselves. And there is a positive correlation between
fuel
price
and car
price
. So, if the
fuel
price
goes up, car prices increase, too.
Therefore
, the selling of cars will decrease.
Moreover
, because
this
industry is directly related to the economy, manufacturers have laid off some of their employers. And recession and negative effects would happen in society.
Secondly
, by increasing petrol’s
price
the cost of the foods and ingredients will rise. Because
for
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transferring goods from the countryside to the cities
it
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needs trucks, and trucks consume
fuel
.
Therefore
, increasing the
price
of petrol has irreversible consequences
to
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the economy and society.
Although
increasing the
price
of petrol is one
way
to tackle the issue, there are other measures that can be more effective. One solution is that the city's infrastructure is developed by the government, specifically in public transportation.
For example
, expand routes and renew the vehicles, and encourage people to use them
instead
of their private cars. The other
way
is to apply tax on individuals who use their own cars in some polluted areas.
For instance
, in Tehran, province, the capital of Iran, the government has imposed a fee on drivers who use their vehicle during rush hours to reduce pollution, and in some specific areas from 6:30 am to 6:00 pm if people want to go there, they have to pay. In conclusion, traffic congestion and pollution have become a serious challenge.
Although
increasing petrol prices might be a
way
to solve
this
problem, I think it has some disadvantages. There are other effective ways like developing public transportation, and applying tax to tackle these problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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