The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtowi business district.

The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtowi business district.
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This
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table depicts the spending
money
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on a small restaurant in a downtown business area, from
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the 7th
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to
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of October. It is clear from the graph that, Wednesday had the most
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on
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the Lunch
and the second most
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on the
Dinner
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.
According to
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what is shown, on Monday the
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were at $2,400 on The
Lunch
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. And on Tuesday the
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slightly increased to $2,450 on the
Lunch
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. As for
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Wednesday,
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the spending
money
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on the
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was $2,595. Next
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,is Thursday
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the
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were $2,375 on the
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.
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on Friday the spending
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on the
Lunch
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was $2,500. And
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Saturday and Sunday are the weekends the
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were at their lowest accounting for $1,950 and $1,550 on the
Lunch
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.
On the other hand
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, the
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on Monday were $3,623
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the
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. And on Tuesday and
Wednesday
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Wednesday,
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the
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on the
Dinner
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jumped just $227 compared to the
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on Monday reaching $3,850 for each.
Whereas
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, on Thursday the
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on the
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were $3,800.
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, on Friday the spending
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were
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at
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its
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most on the
Dinner
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, accounting for $4,350. And,
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, the
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on the
Dinner
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on the weekends
also
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were at their lowest representing $2,900 and $2,450.
To sum up
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, we could say that the
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on the
Dinner
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were more than on the
Lunch
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on all the weekdays.
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