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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Introduction
Climate concern has been
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a
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major concern all over the world. People come to
opinion
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the opinion
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 that they need to live
along
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with
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the
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climate change
instead
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 of taking preventive steps.
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I totally disagree with
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.
This
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details
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the details
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Major
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A major
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 factor for climate change is global warming .
Emission
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The emission
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 of many harmful gases into
air
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the air
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 can
cause
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 increase
increase
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in the levels of co which is really harmful
for
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human
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the human
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 environment.
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Which causes
depletion
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the depletion
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 of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer .
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer protects
earth
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the earth
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 from Uv Rays,
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 in its absence sun rays directly reach
skin
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the skin
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 causing many skin problems.
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Another major issue would be
melting
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the melting
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 of
glaceirs
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glaciers
 causing
increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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sea
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the sea
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 level . And in
next
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the next
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 years many coastal regions may submerge .
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For example
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mount
everst
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Everest
ever
 had reported many melting.
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On
other
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the other
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 hand, Uneven rainfall can destroy many crops
along with
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 no rainfall lead to drought. Harmful waste released
to
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into
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the river
a river
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river
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rivers
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 can evaporate and
cause
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 acid rains causing damage to
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both mankind and animals. There is
also
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change
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a change
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 in season
pattern
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patterns
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 like we are not
intendedseasons
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intended seasons
. Excessive floods can
cause
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 soil
erosin
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erosion
 taking away all fertile soilFor example
hailstroms
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hailstorms
 in winter can
effect
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affect
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crops and
cause
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 loss.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I would say there needs to
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preventive
preventative
prventive
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 measures
along with
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 getting used to living like that

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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