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With the advancement of technology,more and more people are able to work from home. This brings lots of benefits to workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The massive development of
internet
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the internet
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 and gadgets bring extensive benefits in supporting
people
 to landing in a job from across the country without even leaving the comfort of their bedroom.
While
this
 can offer better flexibility, the risks of being prone to burnout and other mental health issues are worth considering as well. In
this
 essay, I would like to argue the benefit and
drawback
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drawbacks
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from
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of
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 the trend of remote working.
To begin
wih
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with
, the trend of remote working arises
due to
 the concerns
from
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of
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working class
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working-class
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people
 who work 9-to-5 over how hard they feel in achieving work-life balance and how little free
time
 they have to spend with their loved ones. Working from home enables
people
 to have more balance in their professional life because they can allocate their commute
time
 to spend with their family or
doing
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 hobbies. Unfortunately,
this
 benefit
also
 comes with its own drawback. Since
people
 do not need
to
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spare
time
 to commute and
more
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 leeway in setting up
the
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apply
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work hours,
people
 are often trapped in
burnouts
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burnout
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.
Furthermore
, it is easier for employees to end up working extra hours because there
is
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are
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 no strict work hours. To some
up
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, working from home can be beneficial as long as
people
 can set healthy boundaries to know when is the
time
 to stop working and enjoy the
time
 to do whatever
that
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apply
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matters.
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