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With the advancement of technology,more and more people are able to work from home. This brings lots of benefits to workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The massive development of
internet
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 and gadgets bring extensive benefits in supporting
people
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 to landing in a job from across the country without even leaving the comfort of their bedroom.
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this
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 can offer better flexibility, the risks of being prone to burnout and other mental health issues are worth considering as well. In
this
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 essay, I would like to argue the benefit and
drawback
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drawbacks
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from
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of
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 the trend of remote working.
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wih
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with
, the trend of remote working arises
due to
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 the concerns
from
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working class
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working-class
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people
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 who work 9-to-5 over how hard they feel in achieving work-life balance and how little free
time
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 they have to spend with their loved ones. Working from home enables
people
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 to have more balance in their professional life because they can allocate their commute
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 to spend with their family or
doing
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 hobbies. Unfortunately,
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 benefit
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 comes with its own drawback. Since
people
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 do not need
to
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spare
time
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 to commute and
more
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have more
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 leeway in setting up
the
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work hours,
people
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 are often trapped in
burnouts
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burnout
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.
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, it is easier for employees to end up working extra hours because there
is
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are
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 no strict work hours. To some
up
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, working from home can be beneficial as long as
people
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 can set healthy boundaries to know when is the
time
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 to stop working and enjoy the
time
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 to do whatever
that
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apply
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matters.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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